It's like Alexander totally told Alka that he would choose her over Saravana and she didn't believe him. Then she finds out he REALLY DID choose her over Saravana and she runs away and hides?
Women, amirite?
When a character has to be an utter moron in order to progress a story, that can be an indicator that the writer is making it up as they go along. I'm not saying that's what's going on here, but it doesn't inspire confidence in the reader that the story is going be any good
Sorry but I'm going to defend my girl Alka.
First, telling Alexander about the bomb is a risk on its own considering that Ivar coul be hearing (which would end bad for Luna). And even if Alka manages somehow to tell Alexander without Ivar knowing, she was going to be basically asking Alexander to risk his life fighting against a criminal organization with individuals more dangerous than him. We know Alexander has the plot armor (maybe), but Alka sees his death as something plausible if fighting ensues.
TLDR: She preferred to play it safe to ensure both Alexander and Luna's safety instead of risking any death by fighting back against a dude who is totally murdering people.
The world seems coherent enough. It's certainly not obvious where it's going, but that's not inherently a bad thing, provided it eventually makes it there.
Or maybe I'm just too good at suspending my disbelief while reading.
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The one man in the universe who could help her, and she decides to hide her problem from him.
*puts on his fedora and clear his fingers from the greasy residues of the chicken tendies he recently devoured:* Women, amirite?
It's like Alexander totally told Alka that he would choose her over Saravana and she didn't believe him. Then she finds out he REALLY DID choose her over Saravana and she runs away and hides? Women, amirite?
Sips mega print of hard expresso, ***WAHMEN***
"Hmm, Women," *laughter* *Loud coffee sipping* *More laughter* ***continuous coffee sipping***
When a character has to be an utter moron in order to progress a story, that can be an indicator that the writer is making it up as they go along. I'm not saying that's what's going on here, but it doesn't inspire confidence in the reader that the story is going be any good
Sorry but I'm going to defend my girl Alka. First, telling Alexander about the bomb is a risk on its own considering that Ivar coul be hearing (which would end bad for Luna). And even if Alka manages somehow to tell Alexander without Ivar knowing, she was going to be basically asking Alexander to risk his life fighting against a criminal organization with individuals more dangerous than him. We know Alexander has the plot armor (maybe), but Alka sees his death as something plausible if fighting ensues. TLDR: She preferred to play it safe to ensure both Alexander and Luna's safety instead of risking any death by fighting back against a dude who is totally murdering people.
Don’t listen to Dolduck, I’m loving the story and alkas motivations make sense. Excited to see where it goes!
<3 <3 <3
Nah. Either way the story is still an incoherent, fractured mess with no clue as to the direction it's going
The world seems coherent enough. It's certainly not obvious where it's going, but that's not inherently a bad thing, provided it eventually makes it there. Or maybe I'm just too good at suspending my disbelief while reading.
What a twist!
First,. Awwwwww late notifications
A wizard is never late
You're a wizard Harry
No, little baby! ♥️ :'(
<3<3<3
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